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五級分範例一 (有[主旨句]，缺［結論］)（ 加紅色為錯字或文法有誤，加底線者為可學習字彙，反黃色為可學習句法。點文句注釋後藍色部份可見全文分析。﹚
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The lecturer talks about research conducted by a firm that used the group system to handle their work. He says that the theory stated in the passage was very different and somewhat inaccurate when compared to what happened for real.
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First, some members got free rides. That is, some didn’t work hard but got recognition for the success nontheless. This also indicates that people who worked hard was not given recognition they should have got. In other words, they weren't given the oppotunity to "shine.” This derectly contradicts what the passage indicates.
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Second, groups were slow in progress. The passage says that groups are nore responsive than individuals because of the number of people involved and their aggregated resources. However, the speaker talks about how the firm found out that groups were slower than individuals in dicision making. Groups needed more time for meetings, which are neccesary procceedures in
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decision making. This was another part where experience contradicted theory.
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Third, influetial people might emerge, and lead the group towards glory or failure. If the influent people are going in the right direction there would be no problem. But in cases where they go in the wrong direction, there is nobody that has enough influence to counter the decision made. In other words, the group might turn into a dictatorship, with the influential party as the leader, and might be less flexible in thinking. They might become one-sided, and thus fail to succeed.
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本範例雖出現許多打字上的錯誤(見紅色的部份)，但閱讀和聽力部份的重點，如：團體決策的速度、團體中的分工等，掌握得很好。最後一段第一個influential是很明顯的拼字錯誤，但之後在句子中出現的influential都拼對了。整體言之，本範例雖出現拼字、打字等錯誤，但由於要點掌握的恰到好處，可列入五級分的文章（但非首選）。
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五級分範例二 (有[結論]，缺［主旨句］)
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To begin with, the lecturer agrues that although a group tends to have a greater resource of skills and expertises, these resources may not necessarily be effefectively used. According to a recent company project, it was found that one or two members dominated over the whole group, when the dominant members asserted or banned an idea, most of the other group members would follow their ideas and "suppress" the other ideas that were suggested, even if the other ideas were more creative and innovative.
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Secondly, it was proved that, on the contrary of the reading, progress in the project was very slow. this was the result of long debates over reaching a compromise as ideas were diverted and consenus took a lenghty period of time.
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Thirdly, as a group would be credited collectively, quite a number of unfair situations appeared. in the group. it was found that some members did not work hard at all and got a "free ride." However, those worked harder were not rewarded for their extra efforts as their individual efforts would not be recognized.
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And lastly, paragraph says that everyone feels responsible for their own part, and all together they are all more effective as a team. In the lecture, doubt was expressed concerning the advantages of the recent trend of forming teams to tackle projects, which was mentioned in the reading.
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Concluding, via the results of a recent company that adopted the "group method" of tackling projects, the lecturer projected doubts that contradicted with the central standpoint of the reading. the lecturer believes that skills and expertise cannot be maximized in a group, progress is slow and the overall results of the team is not a fair assessment of the individual members of the group-which contradicts with the central standpoint of the reading.
四級分範例一
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The lecture that followed the paragraph on the team work in organizations, gave some negative views of the team work itself.
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Firstly, though it was said in the paragraph that the whole team idea would probably be faster than the individual work, it was said in the lecture just the opposite: it could actually be a lot slower. That is because team members would sometimes take more time than needed just to reach the same conclussions, or just even to simply decide where to go from certain point to the next one.
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Secondly, paragraph suggests that by doing work as a team might give you an "edge." The lecture suggests that that might also be a negative thing as well. The people who made themselves leaders in the group may just be wrong in certain decisions, or just simple thing something is so creative, when in reality it is not and it would not work, but the rest of the people would
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nevertheless still follow them, and end up not doing well at all.
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And lastly, paragraph says that everyone feels responsible for their own part, and all together they are all more effective as a team. The lecture suggests quite the opposite in this case as well. It suggests that some team members are there only for the "free ride," and they don't do much of anything to contribute, but still get the credit as a whole.
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1. 拼字錯誤
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2. 連貫閱讀和聽力提到的重點，就團體共識和團體分工兩點的討論，很完整。
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3. 可惜第三段，陳述團體中較有號召力者可能為團體帶來的負面影響的部份，不是很清楚。尤其是一句，需要再潤飾和解釋。故本範例列為四級分。
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According to the lecture, the group work was found to have several disadvantage.
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First, in a team, those who do not lively participate in the projects could enjoy free time yet gain the benefit from the team's success as the real contributors do. Even though the success is much obliged to the real contributors, they are not be praised but it is the group as a whole that enjoy the success. It is not rewarding as the reading predicts.
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Second, in contrast to the reading’ s claim that a group can work quickly, the study showed that it's the opposite. That is because it takes extra times to reach consensus and build agreement among members.
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In addition, the influencer in the group can ruin the projects. The ideas rejected by the influencer are simply dropped even though other people think it is quite good. The opposite is the same story. If the influencer thinks certain idea is good, then even though other people warn that it might not work, the idea will be the winner.
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The results are even worse. If the projects led by the influencer fails, it's all the members who are blamed.
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1.首段名詞單複數的小錯誤.
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2.主旨句、段落主題句分明。本範例以聽力部份提出的主要缺點為主，詳細指出團隊合作：分工不均、決策費事、少數人左右團體決策等問題。
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3. 但撰文重點稍微偏重聽力的部份，閱讀的部份寫的稍微簡略。見文句注釋［簡略］。
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The idea of the lecture and the contents of the given passage contradicted very much. The reading said that wider range of knowledge, expertise and skills of team members may improve team's performance. But it seemed to generate lot of ego clashes between them. Also, the reading said that a group can work more quickly in response to the task, but here, no consensus was reached for a long time and it took several meetings to come to an agreement. It was also thought that all team members can have their thoughts forwarded, but it was more for the people who were influential that decided the fate of the decision. Also there was no credit given to members of the group when they progressed a lot in a team, as againstr the reading, rather it was considered team effort. There were lot of differences from the reading to the speech. The only thing that seemed to be in correlation between the two were the project’s failure. The whole team was blamed and none of the individuals were pointed out.
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1.拼字錯誤, lot of 的用法。
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2.主旨句、段落主題句分明。本範例先提出閱讀部分的論點，再以聽力部分的論點反駁之，雖無分段，但一正一反，正反論點都交代得很清楚。
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3. detail 的部份稍微簡略，見文句注釋［簡略］。
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The lecturer provide the opposite opinion concerning what the article offered. The team work often bring negative effet. As we all know superficially, team work and team spirits are quite popular in today's business world and also the fashionable terms. However, the lecturer find deeper and hiding results.
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Firstly, the working results of team members can't be fully valued. For example, if a team member does nothing in the process of team discussion, decision making and final pratice, his or her work deliquency will not be recognized because we only emphasize team work. Also, the real excellent and creative member's work might be obliterated for the same reason.
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Secondly, the team work might lose its value when team members are leading by several influential people in the group. One of the essential merits of team is to avoid the individule wrong. But one or two influential or persuasive people will make the team useless.
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Thirdly, team work oftem become the excuse of taking responsibillity. All in charge, nobody care.
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All in all, what we should do is the fully distinguish the advantages and disadvantages of a concept or widely used method. That is to keep the common sense.
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1. 拼字、主動詞不一致、名詞單複數等顯著且頻繁的錯誤。
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2. 文意不清，前因後果未交代清楚。或是段落長度不夠，遺漏部份論點。
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3. 論點和論點間的銜接不完整、或與原文有所出入。
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The lecture and the paragraph are completely contradictory. First of all, the lecture says that the work of the group is going to be recognized in a hole, not individually, giving no space for this last. Second, the lecture says that the work is going to take more time once that the group is going to take more discussions and take time to decide how are they going to proceed within the group work. Besides that the one who leads the group has the power, somehow, to see if the discussion is going to proceed or if it’s going to be hiden, and, in this way, make his/her personal desire kept in front of the others. We can also percept that as a group there will be someones who’s going to carry the group on their back and trere’ll be others who’ll be static without doing even a single thing. By these points of view we can see that there advantages and disadvantages in group working.
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1. 拼字錯誤、間接問句的寫法錯誤。
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2. 主題句不夠鮮明，無法從主題句便了解小段所欲表達之意。
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3. 沒有適當的融入閱讀部份的論點。
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In a company's experement, some new projects were planed and acomplished by different teams. Some teams got very good results while some teams didn't. That is to say it’s not nessesary for teams to achieve more than individuals do because some team members may only contribute a little in a team for they may relying on the others to do the majority.
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Another thing is the recognition for the achievement by the team is for the whole team, for everyone in the team. It's not only the dicision makers in the team feel good after successfully finishing the project, but also every member in the team.
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It is also showed in the lecture that in a team with one or two leaders, sometimes good ideas from some team member are dropped and ignored while sometimes they may be highly creative. In some teams decisions were made without collecting ideas from all team members. Then it would be hard to achieve creative solutions.
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For those failed projects, blames are always given to the whole team even though it's the leader or someone in the team who caught the unexpected result.
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1. 明顯且頻繁的文法錯誤。
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2. 論點和論點銜接的邏輯有誤。
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3. 論點解讀有誤、或呈現論點的寫作能力有限。
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4. 遺漏重要論點。
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In the organization, there are many advantage for group teams to work together and make some advantages to the group. Thery are some problem that individual can be better than group; however, many problem can be done better by groups. There are many different points of views in the article and lecture about group teams work.
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In the article, ther are many advantage about working in group. First of all, the group member can share the ability, knowledge, and skill better than individual ;moreover, the greater number than individual make the job goes quicklier that individual. In the way group workers make a decision, it can be faster than individual because the work can be seperate and all member can help each other to make a faster decision.
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In the other hand, the lecture shows that the group workers may not be able to work better and faster than in dividual because making a decision by many people take longer time than individual. The instructure shows one example about group worker problems. It is about a competition between many group workers, and it seems to be more problem during the race.
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Finally, some of group worker fail the work because they cannot compleate the work together.
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In the listening expose a the problemas that a person in a team will find, such as not and equal work, envolving from the members. But at the end you will be evalueted as a hole, so what ever you do in your team, even though that your part, was well developed, but the end work not, your effort wont be recognize it will be criticies and also you capable of working as a member of a team
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On the other side the reading presentes the benefts of working in a group, such as having more creative solutions to problems or the team will take more risk, by dividing the risk into all the members.
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So in order to succed as a team, the company must put all the right elements together, to make the group work, for example all the members should have same caracteristics, for example, the posibility to interact with diferent people, be patience, heard everybodys comments, responsibility, and so on but this is part of the companys procidures, the must stablish a patern to create the right team for the right problem. In this case the firm will be more productive and the members will get there recognition
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In this lecture, the example shows only one of the group succeed the project. Why the group will succeed on this project it is because of few factor.
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First of all, a group of people has a wider range of knowledge, expertise, and skills than any single individual is like to prossess, and easier to gather the information and resources to make the work effectively. and the group will willingly to trey sometihing is risky decision to make the project for interesting and suceessful. it is because all the member of the group carries the differnt responsibility for a decision, so once the decision turn wrong, no a any individual one will be
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On the other way, the groups which are fail the project is because they are lay on some more influence people in the group, so even the idea is come out. Once the inflenced people say that is no good, then the process of the idea will be drop down immediately instead taking more further discussion! So the idea will not be easy to settle down for a group.
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The form of the group is very important, and each of the member should be respect another and try out all the idea others had suggested,then it will develop a huge idea and the cooperate work environment for each other for effectively work!
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1. 所提的論點僅包含閱讀的部份，與聽力部份沒有太大的關聯、或根本無關。
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the lecture and passage talk their relationship in the team and who the comfort . the decision that people with knowledge take in the team and solution risky decisions. the members that form part of team help the others members for
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